I have to say that I'm not sure on this one. It left me very uneasy, a combination of puzzled and fearful? Not sure exactly.
It was not an ...(more)
I just re-read this for the umpteenth time, and I spotted at least three verbage mistakes, a few tense errors and a couple of spots where I didn't ...(more)
I don't think you are supposed to rate your own story. :)
I didn't say I didn't like him...just that the shower line didn't fit with the story, not with him.
But why would you have him be a jerk? W...(more)
SOOOOO sorry! I meant Jack's mom!